The Gift Of The Empty Hand (edit #3)

[ellajam]

I find the message of the poem truly inspiring. The emotion that was given to these personal possessions embodies the human nature of always holding onto past memories. Good or bad.
The poem suggests that there is nothing better than having a clear state of mind. And memories are now just "things" that no longer carry any significance to our futures.

I personally feel like edit No.2 is better than edit 2.1. The brevity that is found in the latter edit strips the suspense and climax away from the poem. By keeping the longer list of household items such as "rescued vacuum cleaners". The brevity found in the updated version strips the universal message of the poem of its personal tone. I personally think that is the ideal version. The adjectives carrying neutral connotations that are found in the original version also create the same lack of connection with the reader. The adjective "rescued" suits the message of the poem better than "fixable", for example. I think edit No.2 works perfectly for these reasons outlined above.

Thanks so much for letting me know that the poem is starting to work. I appreciate your view of the formatting and your support of "rescued".

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