The Hoi Polloi

[Schmitzhugen]

Dear Schmitzhugen,

This isn't a detailed critique, though I would just like to point out one thing.

The capitalisation at the beginning of each line is quite distracting (to me). I understand that some poets use capitalisation at the beginning of each line in traditional poems (usually metered, four lines per stanza type poetry), however, this poem is presented in a modern free-form type format. For this reason, I believe it isn't necessary to capitalise every line, and it causes a distraction.

Apart from that, the format is well presented and the poem reads quite well. And I learned a new phrase, "Hoi polloi".

I especially liked the 6th stanza

Emma

Dear Emma,

Thanks a lot for your feedback, it's been duly noted and I think you're right- they are a distraction, and will be removed asap.

And thanks for your kind comments on the 6th stanza- I was worried it might feel out of place in the poem, and I was debating whether or not to exclude it.