12-28-2015, 09:58 PM
Dear Schmitzhugen,
This isn't a detailed critique, though I would just like to point out one thing.
The capitalisation at the beginning of each line is quite distracting (to me). I understand that some poets use capitalisation at the beginning of each line in traditional poems (usually metered, four lines per stanza type poetry), however, this poem is presented in a modern free-form type format. For this reason, I believe it isn't necessary to capitalise every line, and it causes a distraction.
Apart from that, the format is well presented and the poem reads quite well. And I learned a new phrase, "Hoi polloi".
I especially liked the 6th stanza
Emma
This isn't a detailed critique, though I would just like to point out one thing.
The capitalisation at the beginning of each line is quite distracting (to me). I understand that some poets use capitalisation at the beginning of each line in traditional poems (usually metered, four lines per stanza type poetry), however, this poem is presented in a modern free-form type format. For this reason, I believe it isn't necessary to capitalise every line, and it causes a distraction.
Apart from that, the format is well presented and the poem reads quite well. And I learned a new phrase, "Hoi polloi".
I especially liked the 6th stanza
Emma