12-28-2015, 09:14 AM
Jacob,
"Dale - Isn’t there some quote about analysis being more profitable when you assume that the writer knows what they are doing?"
I think you misunderstand this critique thing. I could care less who wrote a poem. The poem must stand on it's on. I do not take the writer into account at all. If I am guilty in my critique it is of not using the less personal "one" instead of you. I apologize for that, sometimes I get lazy. I don't believe I have ever said, well at least not in a critique, that this poem was "crappy poetry". I do try and point out what to me appear to be problematic elements. In terms of "averted vision" which I did not think was in play from the start because you said, "I will not look". But, averted vision is "Averted vision is a technique for viewing faint objects which uses peripheral vision. It involves not looking directly at the object, but looking a little off to the side..." Wiki. Notice, " but looking a little off to the side"
I interpreted " blurred periphery" as tears. I do not think think this is an entirely off the wall interpretation. It may have not been what the writer was shooting for, but whose fault is that? There are plenty of people out there who blame the reader for a problem in the poem, they reside at the hundreds of vanity sites. I've yet to find a problem in any of my poems, especially in terms of clarity that were not my fault.
Best,
dale
"Dale - Isn’t there some quote about analysis being more profitable when you assume that the writer knows what they are doing?"
I think you misunderstand this critique thing. I could care less who wrote a poem. The poem must stand on it's on. I do not take the writer into account at all. If I am guilty in my critique it is of not using the less personal "one" instead of you. I apologize for that, sometimes I get lazy. I don't believe I have ever said, well at least not in a critique, that this poem was "crappy poetry". I do try and point out what to me appear to be problematic elements. In terms of "averted vision" which I did not think was in play from the start because you said, "I will not look". But, averted vision is "Averted vision is a technique for viewing faint objects which uses peripheral vision. It involves not looking directly at the object, but looking a little off to the side..." Wiki. Notice, " but looking a little off to the side"
I interpreted " blurred periphery" as tears. I do not think think this is an entirely off the wall interpretation. It may have not been what the writer was shooting for, but whose fault is that? There are plenty of people out there who blame the reader for a problem in the poem, they reside at the hundreds of vanity sites. I've yet to find a problem in any of my poems, especially in terms of clarity that were not my fault.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.