Signs

[shurgaree]

Yarr! Nice. It reminds me of the song Terrapin Station by the Grateful Dead- check it out if you don't know it. Comments in bold below.

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In her palm she held fire
so bright; searing light on display
so all could see,
but none could touch.

He, entranced by her energy,
tried to touch her incandescent flame.
In his hand he held water,
free-flowing and unconstrained.

Curiously, she gave her hand. Confused, --Would you want to put Confused at the start of the next line?
her brightness diminished.
She grew like a star, like a supernova
until finally, she exploded.

he without form
She without form
Why either would have lost form doesn't make too much sense to me. i guess she held fire/it went out, I'm not sure why he would have been without form though. but whether it matters/whether my comment is relevant is your call. Your poem.