12-23-2015, 10:00 AM
(12-20-2015, 10:37 AM)TSlate Wrote: A volume beckoned me to pryHello,
its body open. I obliged,
and secrets slipped inside. My mind
devoured every pulsing line,
and brilliance sparked where words aligned.
Complete, I matched each gap to spine.
Not knowing where my friend belonged,
I laid it maybe somewhere wrong,
then gathered up my borrowed fund,
absconding soon as I was done.
Very first post here, so just do apologize if I am not up to par in my critique. I very much enjoyed this nice short poem, and honestly do not see much wrong with it. Then again, I am brand new to this whole critiquing mess (at least, other than critiquing my own peotry, which happens too much) so I may be wrong, though hopefully not!
Absconding was a very good word choice, by the way, in my opinion.
