Our Lady The Opaque

[Jacob]

like the sun and the stars I like the way this line shifts between the one above and below. I'm undecided on the cliched simplicity.
you glow brighter when I look away Interesting.

Thanks for the feedback. 
I am also undecided about the mild cliche of those lines. It's an important image to the poem, works very well thematically, but the whole thing about stars looking smaller when you look right at them isn't exactly an original point. Applying the same idea to the sun might be (the optical effect works the same way, you just can't do it for long) but I'm not sure. I've tried to rephrase it without much success. 
At one point it was "Your glow expands when I look away," which was more precise with regard to my mental image but didn't flow as well.