In a Fall

[Achebe]

I am a total poetry novice. I haven't had time to do much reading and studying on this great site, but I want to make it a much higher priority in the future.

This is really what I consider to be my first poem, and by that I mean that I revised it a number of times over the last couple of months when I had the time and inclination to work on it again, instead of what I usually do, just throw down a bunch of verbiage and then move on to something else. This is a very, very simple poem that I'm making for a very dear, close friend, so, in that regard, it's more than adequate, because she will have a reference point from which to evaluate it. And I can fill in the blanks in discussing it with her, if necessary. I plan to make an 11"x14" digital photo print containing the poem and a graphic image I'm making, and give it to her as a Christmas gift.

I'd love any feedback that I can get from anyone, because I want to get ideas to make the poem the best that it can be, with the rather simplistic message that it contains. I have personal reasons to make it four stanzas with four lines in each stanza, to make it compatible with a poem my friend made for me earlier this year. I'd very much appreciate feedback from ellajam -- for the sweet, feminine input -- and from tectak -- who I hope rips it to shreads, if he feels it's appropriate, because I want to improve it -- and from anyone else who wishes to give his or her impressions.

Well, that's about it, and here's my little ditty:

In a Fall

As leaves flutter to the ground,
Some might wonder what they've found
In a life filled with wonder,
Sunshine, rain, wind, and thunder. .... to match the meter of the previous line

Change does arrives in the xxxx fall, ---- might be a good idea to get rid of the 'does', and instead add in a 2 syllabled word in the part marked xxxx
May also in falls from grace .....to go with the meter of the preceding line
That takes one to a new place, ....I interpreted this to mean that 'change' takes one to a whole new place, not the 'falls from grace'. If the latter, then ok.
Some of life's issues to face.

There, nervously awaiting,
Even anticipating
Interpretations anew,
Displaying another view.....you may want to rethink this line as it's only there for the rhyme.

With time, insights come and go,
Leading one again to know
That process is nature's way, ....might want to capitalise the "P"
Evolving each day by day.

Larry B. ... ...  ... thanks, all !!!

Good luck with your effort.
Apart from the above, my summary observations:

S1 - ok, opening
S2 - ok, talking about changes in life
S3 - ok, carrying on further about changes in life
S4 - some sort of a summary and conclusion that is not easy for the reader to understand.