12-05-2015, 02:43 PM
(12-05-2015, 07:14 AM)samyarb Wrote: "My roommate’s socks
penetrate walls
and envelope rooms." Everyone seems to like this...I like the idea, but when I read "envelope rooms" it made me think of envelope rooms literally...like a post office.
"thumping into shorts,
bumping into tables" I'm also not a fan of this line. I've never thumped into shorts.
I do like the last line "when he leaves a dirty knife in the sink..." I think that it really works.
samyarb pointed out a typo.
"Envelope" is that paper thing you use to put snail-nail in.
"Envelop" is the correct word for "surround completely" etc.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions

