12-05-2015, 07:14 AM
"My roommate’s socks
penetrate walls
and envelope rooms." Everyone seems to like this...I like the idea, but when I read "envelope rooms" it made me think of envelope rooms literally...like a post office.
"thumping into shorts,
bumping into tables" I'm also not a fan of this line. I've never thumped into shorts.
I do like the last line "when he leaves a dirty knife in the sink..." I think that it really works.
penetrate walls
and envelope rooms." Everyone seems to like this...I like the idea, but when I read "envelope rooms" it made me think of envelope rooms literally...like a post office.
"thumping into shorts,
bumping into tables" I'm also not a fan of this line. I've never thumped into shorts.
I do like the last line "when he leaves a dirty knife in the sink..." I think that it really works.