January Floods
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I had a hard time trying to understand this poem. I re-read it several times, and it just doesn't flow well. 

"-then the slow              
seeping
Explosion of a violet             You capitalized "Explosion" which made me think that was a separate idea from the slow seeping and it just didn't read well
invasion"

I don't really understand the space at the end either, separating "an army of strain".  I don't think it is necessary.
I think I would enjoy this poem more if I knew what you were describing.
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January Floods - by charlie142 - 01-20-2015, 06:12 AM
RE: January Floods - by Brownlie - 01-20-2015, 08:16 AM
RE: January Floods - by Magpie - 01-20-2015, 12:36 PM
RE: January Floods - by Balor1712 - 06-11-2015, 12:23 PM
RE: January Floods - by xyroph - 12-01-2015, 02:04 PM
RE: January Floods - by samyarb - 12-05-2015, 06:26 AM
RE: January Floods - by ThePen - 12-08-2015, 04:43 AM
RE: January Floods - by DrGoldsmack - 12-10-2015, 11:26 AM
RE: January Floods - by enigmaticexistence - 12-14-2015, 04:10 PM



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