January Floods

[xyroph]

January Floods

It's not a
crash
a plunge
a tumble -
Rather a dull
thud
- then the slow,  
seeping
Explosion of a violet
invasion

an army of strain
in the squalor of the sighs Maybe a little elaboration on the sighs? They sound important, since you could have omitted the "the" beforehand.

I agree that the wording is absolutely beautiful, but its impact is limited by its vague-ness. That said, I suspect more detail would disjoint the flow, and this piece does have great flow in my opinion. I dont know what follow-able advice I can offer, so I'll just read the poem over and over and appreciate what it has to offer