12-01-2015, 02:04 PM
I've made a little edit to this poem based on your crits Ray. I think the roommate's annoyingness is a little more mundane and realistic now, which I think better compliments the surrealism of the intended murder bit.
I like the title as is, imagining murder as a form of meditation is enough of an idea for a poem (for me) even without the "pre-meditated" wordplay.
I like the title as is, imagining murder as a form of meditation is enough of an idea for a poem (for me) even without the "pre-meditated" wordplay.