12-01-2015, 07:05 AM
interesting thoughts, ronsaik. My only thought (objection) is that it seems like removing madmen and instead using a pronoun might make the poem too abstract, with no subject clearly defined.
Perhaps a child might not get the concept of madmen, but maybe bad men would be a better choice... I'll have to think about it.
ellajam, thank for your thoughts aswell. I also agree with your thoughts about truly making this from a child's point of view. I want to keep the poem with easy syllables and clear words, so I'll have to think about might what work better.
Perhaps a child might not get the concept of madmen, but maybe bad men would be a better choice... I'll have to think about it.
ellajam, thank for your thoughts aswell. I also agree with your thoughts about truly making this from a child's point of view. I want to keep the poem with easy syllables and clear words, so I'll have to think about might what work better.