Mommy, I didn't mean to cry

[DeakinDeakin]

Hi there thanks for sharing.  I particularly enjoyed the choice of language in this poem.  The spacing below Boom is confusing and seems an unnecessary distraction from an otherwise inventive scenario.  Best wishes Deakin

Boom.  Fantastic word.  Don't understand the spacing though

There's banging outside,
Because I cried, I cried!
Shriek.  
There's screaming outside,
Oh! how they died, they died!

Crack.  Also a good word. Boom and Crack anchor the verse very well

There's madmen outside,  This is a quality line.  Everyone needs madmen in their life.
can we hide, mommy hide!

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