Starting the poem on the trochee with "Will" is an excellent use of emphasis, and exactly the right decision in my opinion.
The more I read it, the more I'm loving your use of "ignominious"
"One" fixes the "a" stress problem nicely, well done. And I do like "affirm" instead of "assent" -- these are great edits.
The more I read it, the more I'm loving your use of "ignominious"
"One" fixes the "a" stress problem nicely, well done. And I do like "affirm" instead of "assent" -- these are great edits.