Of Waste

[Minu]

To be honest, this is pretty bad. The combination of the tortured meter and forced rhymes should be enough to scare most readers away, but the "list of hyperbolic abstractions" actually makes me cringe.  I would recommend you take a single image or concept and develop it properly and consistently all the way through the poem and avoid tweenie cliches like "hopes die", "bloodided earth", "scorched lands" etc, etc, etc.

There is not a single line or image here that I would recommend keeping, better to think of something fresh, new or original.  Also, avoud those painful inversions.

You might want this moved to novice until it is polished enough for "serious"

Yet it has been published twice by two separate poetry magazines in Europe. So there must have been something they liked.