Do You Remember Me?

[eclecticaffect]

First ever poem, so all thoughts and suggestions are eagerly invited!

Do You Remember Me?
 
Do you remember me?
When our stars struck over the churning seas
We burst into a million little pieces,
Each a letter spelling our love,
Down to the water they rained
A lingering luminescence
So we lit the legend of you and me
When our stars struck above the churning seas
 
Do you remember me?
When we made love ’neath the sycamore tree
When I was the artist,
And you were my canvas,
Each kiss a new colour 
In the palette of our existence
So we sketched the story of you and me
When we made love ’neath the sycamore tree.
 
Do you remember me?
I remember you –
I do.

I have the tendency to imagine what I read. I applaud your first stanza because I made a music video in my head with it!   

My thoughts: Your 1st stanza starts out so strong and vivid. The first two lines in the 2nd stanza make a great transition, but the rest doesn't seem to hold the same strong emotions as the 1st. Or it belongs in another poem.

The ending is a bit abrupt for me, but that may be due to my modern sensibility as John1865 pointed out.