To dust.
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Hi, I think this would read better with line breaks.

A possible suggestion -

Marching marionettes -
sandpaper veins
chisel through kneecaps.

Also I would consider changing chisel as it is a very specific verb and it doesn't seem quite right here.

I do like the image as a whole.

Mark
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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To dust. - by H[a/o]llowheart - 11-24-2015, 11:41 AM
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