11-24-2015, 07:58 PM
Hi, I think this would read better with line breaks.
A possible suggestion -
Marching marionettes -
sandpaper veins
chisel through kneecaps.
Also I would consider changing chisel as it is a very specific verb and it doesn't seem quite right here.
I do like the image as a whole.
Mark
A possible suggestion -
Marching marionettes -
sandpaper veins
chisel through kneecaps.
Also I would consider changing chisel as it is a very specific verb and it doesn't seem quite right here.
I do like the image as a whole.
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie
