A recipe for soothing white noise

[billy]

i like it but i can't say why. i think a semi colon may have separated the two statements better. i think the last line excellent, at first i thought universe would work better than sky but on second thought i prefer sky and also like the image it gives the white noise. i'd also like to see the ship connection more at work in the 2nd part; as it is it reads as an excerpt from a larger piece.