11-23-2015, 10:02 AM
no need to ask or explain; we only remove comments that are not reasonable feedback, the poet can get something form this one, /mod
I think the original poem was much, much better. I really dont think it needed to be changed. And there is not contradiction between lines 1-2. The man could be holding the flower by a strand (of fibrous plant matter perhaps) or could have dropped it and it now hangs "by a strand." I really don't think the original benefitted from any of the changed except the semicolon change.
NOTE to mods: this is not intended as a review. please do not remove my comment.
I think the original poem was much, much better. I really dont think it needed to be changed. And there is not contradiction between lines 1-2. The man could be holding the flower by a strand (of fibrous plant matter perhaps) or could have dropped it and it now hangs "by a strand." I really don't think the original benefitted from any of the changed except the semicolon change.
NOTE to mods: this is not intended as a review. please do not remove my comment.