11-21-2015, 08:52 PM
@dukealien - Thank you for the review. I intended it to be like a riddle; I am glad that the outward story is clear to you as well.
@rayheinrich - Thank you for the excellent feedback. For some reason, I thought the expression "held by a strand" was a commonly used expression for the idea "barely made it alive"... but I don't consider myself fluent in English and didn't realize strand meant something completely different. I like suggestion you gave however: The idea of being torn from the land fits with what I had in mind writing this piece.
I also appreciate the suggestion to change the point of view to first-person.
Although I had a very specific person and event in mind when writing this, I wanted it to be open to various meanings depending on the reader. I'm amazed at some of the ideas you mentioned. Thank you for the excellent post!
@rayheinrich - Thank you for the excellent feedback. For some reason, I thought the expression "held by a strand" was a commonly used expression for the idea "barely made it alive"... but I don't consider myself fluent in English and didn't realize strand meant something completely different. I like suggestion you gave however: The idea of being torn from the land fits with what I had in mind writing this piece.
I also appreciate the suggestion to change the point of view to first-person.
Although I had a very specific person and event in mind when writing this, I wanted it to be open to various meanings depending on the reader. I'm amazed at some of the ideas you mentioned. Thank you for the excellent post!