Contained

[Cousin Kil]

ContainedI think this is a fantastic title

the thing about a hip-flask Hyphen is unnecessary, I believe
is it says a lot about you—
much more than your shoes I like this.
 
you don’t have a meet-cute Had to google what "meet cute" was, maybe I'm dumb. Also, hyphen is unnecessary again, I believe. I like how "meet-cute" matches up with "hip-flask" in the first line, but I'm not sure that you'd need the hyphen to get that correlation recognized.
with a young mother
in the park at 10am—
spring or fall
 
you go home and sleep through afternoon
dream you’re a king
and forget you were dreaming I want more from these three lines. Not a lot of color to them, though the idea is great and well communicated
 
if you wake
it will be uneasily
 
you will refill the flask
and still not know
it has grown dark
 
the parks are empty. Fantastic finish

There's not much I can complain about in this piece, above are just a few observations.
All in all, I really dig this one. Thanks for the read.
Cousin