11-14-2015, 02:16 AM
@tectak: No problem. I'd be very interested in seeing what you consider to be one or two of your best poems, so I could see for myself how you apply your philosophy. I could also learn from the commentary related to those poems. Would you be interested in providing a couple of links? If not, I can find some poems of yours on my own, and when I have time, I might provide my own critiques ... from the perspective of a poetry novice, but one who is interested in, and somewhat knowledgeable of, communicating ideas and feelings.
best,
Larry B.
@ronsaik: I wasn't criticizing tectak's critique or questioning the validity of it. If I had been the OP, that's the kind of feedback I would have wanted, but I wouldn't have been quite sure how to change the poem to incorporate his suggestions. That's why I asked tectak for his edit, so I could better understand. Regarding your last sentence: that's why I said, "perhaps (?) it wouldn't be appropriate."
Sincerely,
Larry B.
best,
Larry B.
@ronsaik: I wasn't criticizing tectak's critique or questioning the validity of it. If I had been the OP, that's the kind of feedback I would have wanted, but I wouldn't have been quite sure how to change the poem to incorporate his suggestions. That's why I asked tectak for his edit, so I could better understand. Regarding your last sentence: that's why I said, "perhaps (?) it wouldn't be appropriate."
Sincerely,
Larry B.
I drift like a wave on the ocean.
I blow as aimless as the wind.
I blow as aimless as the wind.