11-11-2015, 11:39 PM
What a glorious steeplechase for the reader! 
My interpretation begins (after a couple of readings) with the first and the last two sentences: hopeful childhood for all, reduced to tortured parts and a little corpse at the end (I see reference there to the refugee child pic that went viral).
And that's a bit of a problem: with so many possible references, my interpretation's like the knight who leaped onto his horse and rode off in all directions. Two examples, both purely indiosyncratic: l.5, "retrotectonick" is going fine joining "retro" and "tectonic," but "nick" throws me into gaol ("the nick"). Similarly, "Da Vinci" in L.6 first diverts over capitalization ("Da" rather than "da" - is this a contraction of "Da," Brit. lower-class colloquial "Dad?") and then over "Vinci" (knots, which the artist sometimes drew as a pun on his name).
Some references seem more one-track, like "glowing bitten [A]pple[™]," and some phrases are truly lovely - "fell sleep." Fell, indeed.
If I had to assign a unifying theme, it might be watching and fearing the rush of images on the 'Net - greenhouse gas, asylum-seekers, vegetarians. But I'd rather just run the steeplechase, again and again.
Liked it.
My interpretation begins (after a couple of readings) with the first and the last two sentences: hopeful childhood for all, reduced to tortured parts and a little corpse at the end (I see reference there to the refugee child pic that went viral).
And that's a bit of a problem: with so many possible references, my interpretation's like the knight who leaped onto his horse and rode off in all directions. Two examples, both purely indiosyncratic: l.5, "retrotectonick" is going fine joining "retro" and "tectonic," but "nick" throws me into gaol ("the nick"). Similarly, "Da Vinci" in L.6 first diverts over capitalization ("Da" rather than "da" - is this a contraction of "Da," Brit. lower-class colloquial "Dad?") and then over "Vinci" (knots, which the artist sometimes drew as a pun on his name).
Some references seem more one-track, like "glowing bitten [A]pple[™]," and some phrases are truly lovely - "fell sleep." Fell, indeed.
If I had to assign a unifying theme, it might be watching and fearing the rush of images on the 'Net - greenhouse gas, asylum-seekers, vegetarians. But I'd rather just run the steeplechase, again and again.
Liked it.
(11-11-2015, 06:08 AM)AlstonTowers Wrote: Cockroaches, eat.
Come close to the winding steps beneath the
wishing-well, wish
to being well: long live livelihood good times
childhood for all.
Retrograde retrotectonick electronic colours
in a faded Da Vinci,
smiling, always smiling, forever smiling,
endlessmorelessmoreless.
Fell sleep, bright nightmares create frustrated
fell sleep.
Gas in the sky limpid pink burning skin
the man taps away on
burning phone gases in your pocket
burning leg burning cells
in your meat: your human meat.
Eat meat eat the crows eat the sheep eat the horses eat the cats
eat the dogs and the cockroaches, eat.
Twelve hundred and ninety three pounds
forty even pence
glowing bitten apple in shop that sells coffee
dry sand chafed foot dark scars
in the ground, holes, ground belly, mud
collects
dark spring, dark bud of life and coffee shops.
Escape, get out get free get past
spleenstealers childstuffing fingercracking
spleenstealers.
Baby on a beach, dead.
I suppose what I'm most curious about is if the meaning is too obscure: I'd quite like your interpretations as a measuring tool. I'm quite new to this.
Non-practicing atheist