Charleston

[fluorescent.43]

thanks to SnarlingThroughOurSmiles for the too-kind feedback; to ronsaik, thanks for the much needed critique! as for the first stanza, i hoped i've answered those questions and clarified it slightly. the but placed at the end of the fifth stanza is meant to contrast: in the fifth, i describe the actual appearance of the bridge, but in the sixth, i describe what it looks like in my imagination. i suppose it doesn't contrast enough though. i'm keeping it for now.

if i have to explain the meaning of this poem (it's really quite literal), i feel like i didn't do a good job of communicating what was meant to be a series of quick snapshots of different people living in a city. the snapshots are also from my point of view; the words i used are a direct reflection of my feelings and if they aren't evocative i don't know what i can do... it's too literal to play around with the words too much, i guess.

thanks! i've been away for a long-ish time. i do think i've gotten pretty awful at poetry, but it's nice to be back at it again.