~ Cold Walls ~
#3
Yep, second stanza hit close to home. IĀ remember this feeling all too well. Good job capturing the emotion.

Now that theĀ fire has been hit by a storm

I would add that ^^

Last line:

I can lay here and think about us together.

I would remove the word "together."

Thank you for the feels!
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