~ Cold Walls ~

[thepoorfortune]

I agree. Agony has too many syllables. Maybe finding a good synonym would help to condense that line. Also, the line "Now that fire has been hit by a storm" is a bit elongated. Looking at the line after that one, you could assume that it's pretty long too, but the syllables fit much better. I would consider modifying the former line to be more like the latter. Additionally, the line "I hide under my cold blanket, every single night," would really resonate well with the line after if the word single were omitted. Finally the last line is a bit long too; I would consider breaking it up. It would mess with your 4 stanzas of 4 lines, but I think it would flow better. Say:

"I can lay here,
and think about us together."

On a more positive note, this poem has a very nice gloomy tone. The imagery and sensations are very emotional and easy for your audience to receive. The temperature motif is used very well and your romantic emotion is very enjoyable. Great work!