Foam Walls
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(11-03-2015, 08:17 AM)i.might.be.a.bit.sad Wrote:  I like "creamy silences". Thumbsup I think you could crop a few words to make this a little tighter though.


Between creamy silences,
there lives a hungry nothing in my brain.  not sure about "nothing" - void maybe?
It's strange, really,
that these lonely white walls don't
sing.
Hope that's helpful,
Paul
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Foam Walls - by i.might.be.a.bit.sad - 11-03-2015, 08:17 AM
RE: Foam Walls - by Tiger the Lion - 11-03-2015, 09:30 AM
RE: Foam Walls - by Cousin Kil - 11-03-2015, 01:47 PM
RE: Foam Walls - by thepoorfortune - 11-06-2015, 07:36 AM
RE: Foam Walls - by Minu - 11-23-2015, 04:54 AM
RE: Foam Walls - by DeakinDeakin - 11-24-2015, 01:46 AM
RE: Foam Walls - by RiverNotch - 11-25-2015, 04:01 PM
RE: Foam Walls - by billy - 11-26-2015, 06:17 PM
RE: Foam Walls - by Achebe - 11-26-2015, 08:48 PM
RE: Foam Walls - by QDeathstar - 11-26-2015, 10:11 PM



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