Leviathan

[cidermaid]

Hi, sorry not getting much from this one beyond it's a river!  It there was an under image or metaphor that was intended, than i have to report that for me, it is not coming through and the images, as supplied, of a river do not excite or add anything new to common knowledge / ideas.

I did like the "S" sounds you ran through this one but thought that there were too many "ing" word in there.

A creek in spring
sweeping everything away,
in summer dries out.

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Flowing slower in
fall, the winter river soon
completely stops