11-02-2015, 02:31 AM
Thank you so much for your feedback! I'm gonna rewrite this poem to get rid of some ambiguity and make the message/image a bit more clear and try to incorporate some sort of rhythm instead of just having it as a blank verse. While the poem is supposed to be quite open to interpretation and ambiguous I feel that I do get a bit too carried away at the end so I will work on that as well
