The Clock

[aleexgold]

Overall I really like the poem but below I have made a few suggestions of what you could do to redraft it:

Tick! Tick! It clicks.
Though we hear its chime,
we do not always heed the silent advice  maybe say 'don't' instead of do not to make the poem flow better
that time is running out
for us to paint our little pictures
on the canvas of life.
Let us paint as deftly as we can:
contours designed with vision and worthy aims,
filled with the hues of our talents and creativity,
embellished with the sweat of toiling hands,
and scintillating with the colors of virtues
expressed in virtuous deeds.  You repeat 'virtue' twice in 2 lines-I'm not sure if this is meant for effect but it seems like a mistake
In the unfolding beauty of our creations
we too may find
fulfillment and bliss. it seems like this poems end quite abruptly-maybe add something else at the end like a simile or a metaphor?

Overall there really isn't much that I would change therefore very well done on this great poem!