Looking out

Looking out

Clarko
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10-23-2015, 11:27 AM

I like this. Works well with the photo. I might modify it slightly though. I think "Over my bare feet" could end with exclamation... "Over my bare feet!" like "over my dead body!" and the last line may be stronger with a contradiction, possibly "this moonlit morning."

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Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-18-2015, 09:51 PM

RE: Looking out - by rayheinrich - 10-21-2015, 08:36 AM

RE: Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-21-2015, 09:00 AM

RE: Looking out - by RiverNotch - 10-22-2015, 10:12 PM

RE: Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-22-2015, 11:04 PM

RE: Looking out - by RiverNotch - 10-23-2015, 07:34 PM

RE: Looking out - by just mercedes - 10-23-2015, 03:28 AM

RE: Looking out - by Clarko - 10-23-2015, 11:27 AM

RE: Looking out - by rayheinrich - 10-23-2015, 02:32 PM

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