10-23-2015, 03:28 AM
You've used three adjectives in your haiku. They weaken it.
There's no 'Aha!' moment for me, no change of direction or pivot.
There's no 'Aha!' moment for me, no change of direction or pivot.
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Looking out
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Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-18-2015, 09:51 PM
RE: Looking out - by rayheinrich - 10-21-2015, 08:36 AM
RE: Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-21-2015, 09:00 AM
RE: Looking out - by RiverNotch - 10-22-2015, 10:12 PM
RE: Looking out - by justlikeyou - 10-22-2015, 11:04 PM
RE: Looking out - by RiverNotch - 10-23-2015, 07:34 PM
RE: Looking out - by just mercedes - 10-23-2015, 03:28 AM
RE: Looking out - by Clarko - 10-23-2015, 11:27 AM
RE: Looking out - by rayheinrich - 10-23-2015, 02:32 PM
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