10-22-2015, 08:28 AM
Definitely easier to comprehend critique than actual poetry -- this thread, my job's much more enviable than yours, even if I'm the one to get all the pelting. I have a response already prepared, but I think I should wait first for, say, two or three more, lest I solidify opinions not fully humbled yet. Thanks for the feedback!
Oh, but one thing: I don't think if I distilled this to the barest essentials, I'll get anything of much worth. Something perfect, perhaps, like say an especially sensual haiku, or an especially wise proverb, but also trite, since I feel like there's already something in the structure as a whole, and this is already a bare poem as it goes. But for now, that's just me: again, I will wait.
Oh, but one thing: I don't think if I distilled this to the barest essentials, I'll get anything of much worth. Something perfect, perhaps, like say an especially sensual haiku, or an especially wise proverb, but also trite, since I feel like there's already something in the structure as a whole, and this is already a bare poem as it goes. But for now, that's just me: again, I will wait.