Empty

[elviaje26]

You fall asleep in her arms, but never in mine
You tell her how you feel, but to me you're always fine
For a while I could not accept your denial of my importance in your life
But I was the one who was wrong to begin with
I believed there was something between us
Something that I've only ever caught a glimpse of
And I had hope for us
I had hoped we would grow, together as people
Wrong was I, wrong was I
Not that you are not fit for me
But I am not fit for you 
Only because I am not fit for anyone
As a heart that's never been whole can never truly love
But I do not feel sad to see you with anyone else
I do not feel sad
I do not feel anything at all 
I am empty

First off, in my reading of poems in all of the categories "serious, mild, and novice" this poem struck the most nerve for me. This poem is great and i'm not just saying this. Favorite so far.

What was so great about this poem was the last line
"I am empty"
 and also the line "Only because I am not fit for anyone?:

I feel like your first line, too, should not be editied.

In critique the line- "As a heart that's never been whole can never truly love" seems to not help the poem much and is a bit distant from the rest of the poem. I personally would scrap the line.

-Clay