Parrots

[ellajam]

Hi, Weeded,I think this one suffers from being a little too florid. I'll line by line the opening to give you some idea of my confusion.

Parrots

Baby blue borders met with sunflower yellow With the line below, too many Bs for me, I'd prefer a change out of Baby for Pale or something similar, a nice image, though.
belies beauty in it's subtle chirp and vibrant I don't understand why L1 belies the beauty of L 2  
coat. Only useful to eyes of admiration; Here "admiring eyes" would sound more natural. I can see you working on making your breaks more meaningful but you are doing what I tend to do, sacrificing the meaning and sense of the whole for it. Coat only makes sense on the next line if it means something there - been there, done that.
lack of freedom more depressing than ignorance
to purpose. Equilibrium effervesces of purpose? Are you meaning something else? I haven't gotten a sense of equilibrium until you mentioned it.
to the point it's bubble bursts. Perhaps the reason
why it simply just sits and chirps, when it should fly.

Yet it could never fathom what's beyond its home.
Perhaps it wouldn't last if given the sweet chance
to roam. So there it sits, it's subtle chirp shall ring
this home. Unaware that it has the potential
to sing a song in piercing highs and resonant
lows. If it knew it were trapped it would stage escape
attempts every moment doors open to the cage.

It can't help but not wonder how it'd feel to fly.
It's mind so wrapped around feeding time like addicts
of the pipe, wherein it's mind settles for lesser
qualities of life. But sadly you can't blame it,
you can only hope that one day its mind untames
and truly sees life rather than that cooped up cage.
Forever trapped inside me, this parrot remains.

So, you can see that S1 was just too much for me, I read through the first time but since then I just get stopped at the beginning. I'll give the rest a go later.