Birch Leaves

[justlikeyou]

The shorter the poem, the more intensity it has to demonstrate on an exponential scale. A picture in support to help convey imagery means that the wording isn't doing its job.

'Shiny' is superfluous as this quality is suggested in silver anyway. And birch leaves exhibit pale gold/brown/yellowy hues, nowhere near silver. Apart from a coin belt, belly dancers also wear gold chains and jewellery around their hips, so with that, it may be better to compare their colours and flutterings/shimmerings with birch leaves.

Just a couple of thoughts.

"Shiny" was an attempt at movement. Perhaps "shimmering" would be better. Yes and no about the color of birch leaves. The bright green leaves have an underside that flash silvery in the wind. The ones in the vid above are fall leaves which turn gold. I had in mind the first as witnessed while at a traffic light recently. Thanks a bunch for your imput. I appreciate it.