Birch Leaves

[justlikeyou]

I think I see the problem: there is association, but there is no experience. There is thought and feeling behind your work: there is nothing within itself. Of course, the same can be said for mine, and it's really good that we're all working hard and constant on this. Specifics:

The association here is clearer, but right now, it seems like an empty, or worse still, possibly offensive metaphor. I suppose, though each piece of art can and should speak for itself, the author's intent is important, since art is the author communicating; and of course, the message must be consistent with the form, or at least with the general wisdom. That is to say, do you mean to compare the earth mother to, well, essentially, a harlot? worse still, a harlot giving away all her coin? or something along these lines--
And, well, fundamentally, at least from how I've come to understand it so far, there are no metaphors in haiku, only....well, things. But I suppose I'm not exactly looking at this right.

See if this helps clears up my intent a bit. 



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I think I see the problem: there is association, but there is no experience. There is thought and feeling behind your work: there is nothing within itself. Of course, the same can be said for mine, and it's really good that we're all working hard and constant on this. Specifics:

The association here is clearer, but right now, it seems like an empty, or worse still, possibly offensive metaphor. I suppose, though each piece of art can and should speak for itself, the author's intent is important, since art is the author communicating; and of course, the message must be consistent with the form, or at least with the general wisdom. That is to say, do you mean to compare the earth mother to, well, essentially, a harlot? worse still, a harlot giving away all her coin? or something along these lines--
And, well, fundamentally, at least from how I've come to understand it so far, there are no metaphors in haiku, only....well, things. But I suppose I'm not exactly looking at this right.

See if this helps clears up my intent a bit. 

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then this