10-14-2015, 11:19 AM
(10-09-2015, 09:34 AM)entwife Wrote: daylight dwindlesI really like this one. When I first read it a few days ago I had a distaste for the word "dwindles". I'm over it, it works here. The only suggestion I have is that you may be able to cut "the" in L2. (though that may require an em dash after "dwindles") Just a thought. Thanks for this,
the leaves respond
in vivid tincts
Paul