The Clock

[Larry B.]

I'm new to this forum and, really, a novice at writing and critiquing poetry, but I'll give a few comments based on my present awareness. I hope that's OK.
The first line seems to me to end rather abruptly and "jarringly" move to the second line.
What do you think of:
Tick! Tick! It clicks. Tick! Tick!
For me, that puts a pause between the first and second lines and lets one ponder more the presence of the clock.
In line 5, I'd use another word for "little," something a little more elegant, maybe "simple," or another word that you'd be more qualified to choose to suit your aims; "little" seems rather trite to me.
Re: and scintillating with the colors of virtues
      expressed in virtuous deeds.  
"Virtuous" seems a little repetitive to me, and I'd use another word, perhaps "honorable."

One thing I don't understand yet is why this is even a poem. To me, it could be written out in a short paragraph, as prose. In what genre of poetry would you put your creation? What is it about your work that makes it a poem, from your perspective?

Sincerely,
Larry B.