My Fear

[Stateofmind]

You've brought out the importance of family life in this rhymed, smooth-flowing poem. The man ponders why he's alone; why he's alone is still a mystery. These do not seem to be realistic. Certainly the man knows why he is alone and why he has not married. In 'lifes history', the apostrophe after 'e' seems to be missing.

Yeah ur right the apostrophe is missing. My phone auto-corrected it to "life's" at first and I didn't correct it properly. But as to his pondering. ... he ponders the question of why he's alone. .. not the reasons. Thanks for the advice :-)

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I really enjoyed this piece. Your style is clear and concise and consciously worded. The title "My Fear" reveals how relatable the scenario is. Often it feels as though we have so much love to give, yet receive nothing in return.

Nothing but loneliness. Thanks.

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The main problem is taking so many lines to state the obvious. There's no clue as to why,
no tragic flaw mentioned. And yes, a poem doesn't need to explain. But if it doesn't,
it needs to supply a more detailed description of his suffering. Some images of the man,
a description of his thoughts. Without this, it's a skeleton.

Ray

That's just the point. There is no explanation. No tragic flaw. It's my biggest fear. Growing old alone. .. with no good reason for it. A man with so much love to give. Who wants a family so badly. ... being cursed to be alone. For no good reason other than that life is simply unfair.