A white man's world
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this poem lacks flow and cohesion... it comes off timid and afraid, but maybe that was whitey's point. I disagree about decent subject matter... It's stale and cliche.

Maybe you could write a poem about ebt or having enough kids to qualify for wics.....
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A white man's world - by elviaje26 - 10-09-2015, 04:06 PM
RE: A white man's world - by ellajam - 10-09-2015, 06:28 PM
RE: A white man's world - by John - 10-09-2015, 07:04 PM
RE: A white man's world - by QDeathstar - 10-09-2015, 08:53 PM
RE: A white man's world - by sunilmathur - 10-10-2015, 07:09 PM
RE: A white man's world - by elviaje26 - 10-11-2015, 07:02 AM
RE: A white man's world - by ellajam - 10-11-2015, 07:11 AM
RE: A white man's world - by elviaje26 - 10-11-2015, 07:39 AM
RE: A white man's world - by ellajam - 10-11-2015, 07:52 AM



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