[split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku?

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[split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku?

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10-09-2015, 07:47 PM

(10-09-2015, 06:47 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:
(10-09-2015, 06:35 AM)tectak Wrote:
(10-08-2015, 10:14 PM)ellajam Wrote: You response is why I come to class.
Thaw
butts
shit.

Getting better all the time
Best,
tectak
Disagree, You've removed the adjective from each line. The nouns now have no context. (in fact all 3 of them could be verbs now) You're left with 3 unrelated words. Less is not always more.
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Paul

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[split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by tectak - 10-07-2015, 07:52 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by ellajam - 10-08-2015, 01:33 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by tectak - 10-08-2015, 06:05 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by Tiger the Lion - 10-08-2015, 09:58 PM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by ellajam - 10-08-2015, 10:14 PM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by tectak - 10-09-2015, 06:35 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by Tiger the Lion - 10-09-2015, 06:47 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by tectak - 10-09-2015, 07:47 PM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by RiverNotch - 10-09-2015, 08:40 PM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by rayheinrich - 10-10-2015, 03:04 AM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by rayheinrich - 10-08-2015, 10:07 PM

RE: [split] 3-14-15 'Ku or what's a ku? - by Weeded - 10-09-2015, 07:48 PM

RE: 3-14-15 'Ku - by rayheinrich - 10-07-2015, 06:26 PM

RE: 3-14-15 'Ku - by tectak - 10-08-2015, 01:06 AM

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