My Dream Girl

[milo]

Thanks Ella Ah slipped by me I'll change it now

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Milo,
Noted, any breaks in particular that bug you?

I don't know how familiar you are with line breaks but they are /very/ important in poetry.  i suggest you read a couple of the threads available right on this very forum (helpful ella may be along any minute to guide you along the way).

i would suggest never breaking on "the" and working up from there.