10-02-2015, 01:58 PM
This is an interesting piece to me, but it is begging for some punctuation... It lets the reader know how to navigate the writing... I got lost it in for how it would read different with different punctuations.... In my wondering through this poem... I found "the" in front of "river" in S1L4 a bit unnecessary and that it reads easier without it...
I agree with much of what others have mentioned so will not be redundant... But it is promising piece...
I agree with much of what others have mentioned so will not be redundant... But it is promising piece...
Do you have the patience to wait
Till your mud settles and the water is clear?
Can you remain unmoving
Till the right action arises by itself?
~Lao tzu
Till your mud settles and the water is clear?
Can you remain unmoving
Till the right action arises by itself?
~Lao tzu