10-02-2015, 12:03 PM
I wanted to compare the seemingly simplistic paintings of van Gogh to your seemingly simple lines. The first few lines of your second stanza give me the impression you're not so simple. The rest of your poem and your opening questioning about punctuation make it hard to have faith in the poem. I guess I should have just said your rhymes are cheap and too easy. I was wrong about all the other stuff. Take lead from your second stanza if you want something constructive.