Hooked

[tectak]

Are you hooked yet?
It is just the beginning Is it just
in looking for an audience. No period here
Or annoyance that it continues?

Are you hooked yet?
I bet you are.
Not far to go.
How do you like poems?

Short? You’re in luck.
Are you struck yet? By the lines
you are leaving, with a smile
while reading. Or pleading for a refund? Very clunky stanza. A shower of punctuation. Things just stay where they land.

Hi velv,
This one is languishing and I think I know why. It may be in Fun, it may even be fun, but is it serious? I cannot tell. One of the problems with this kind of loosely pensive prose is the interminable questioning in the text. That it is rhetorical is not in doubt  because who can answer? So what to say? Well, from a none-judgemental viewpoint it is uncomfortably unattractive  to this crit. I say  none-judgemental because who cares what I think? You may well be attempting to introduce a squirm factor and some may say "result". If that is not your aim, then it is in Fun forum because you believe it is funny. It needs to be funnier.
Best,
tectak