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Never Reaching the End
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09-30-2015, 03:58 PM
I assume the first two lines are to set up a contrast of her new life and the carnal(is that the right word) imagery. I like the imagery. It is rough and effective. Slurp definitely sticks out badly. I wish the contrast was more developed. Also wish there was an ending. I felt like I was hanging on and a little deprived. Why is the narrator reminiscing now? How is it affecting the narrator?
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Never Reaching the End - by 71degrees - 09-16-2015, 10:47 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by shemthepenman - 09-16-2015, 11:29 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by underthewronghat - 09-17-2015, 07:27 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by Mark A Becker - 09-17-2015, 09:12 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by Jezie - 09-17-2015, 11:37 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by 71degrees - 09-23-2015, 12:22 PM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by skadragon - 09-30-2015, 03:58 PM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by 71degrees - 10-06-2015, 11:30 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by ellajam - 09-30-2015, 11:01 PM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by RiverNotch - 10-08-2015, 05:31 PM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by 71degrees - 10-13-2015, 11:20 AM
RE: Never Reaching the End - by Achebe - 10-08-2015, 08:37 PM
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