Is Me
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(09-16-2015, 05:37 PM)just mercedes Wrote:  For a small poem it got wordy, I thought. Maybe something like

I long to hold father
to whisper in his ear
it was not in vain    

maybe italics for the final line
That's fair. I'll delete it and move it to a medium poem category Wink
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Is Me - by 71degrees - 09-16-2015, 10:40 AM
RE: Is Me - by just mercedes - 09-16-2015, 05:37 PM
RE: Is Me - by 71degrees - 09-28-2015, 11:52 AM



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